Would you guys play my game idea and who do you think should make it?

Question

My idea is a game called BLACK RAIN. It has sort of some sadness to it. So the story is you're a marine named Sgt. Garrett Connell and he's had a really dark childhood. On his 7th birthday, his family was killed by a group of terrorists known as the War Oracles. One of the attackers said to him,"Don't worry child, black rain will come." So a few years later, Connell is in the marines and is in conflict with the War Oracles. The leader of the War Oracles was known as Abdul Reneir (pronounciation-Ray-nair). His belief was to dominate the world and promise his people that he is the true leader of the world. He tries taking over countries by tricking them into being his partners for business and using them to improve his reputation as a world leader but to him he wants to be higher than the richest country by doing so violently. He wanted to finish what his father started and be as greedy as he can. For the survivors of his attacks he takes them to a concentration camp at his estate.Connell's family was connected him because Connell's father assassinated Abdul's father when he was around. For revenge, Abdul goes to his home and kills everyone leaving only Connell to see the deaths of his mother and father. Abdul leaves the house along with Connell's mother's necklace and his father's dog tags. Now since then Sgt. Connell now finally realizes who this man is capable of doing and now truly understands the real reason why he's trying to do what he's doing. Also,Connell always has dreams of the world being drowned by black rain and you will see these sequences every other level. Connell always had the same question run in his mind, Why did he choose my life? Why me? So what do you guys think? Connell is joined by his buddies Grim and Jackal. Grim and Jackal are close friends with Connell since childhood. There will be a sadness to Jackal later in the game. Also this idea would have the game mode I like to called Radiation Mode. Radiation mode is similar to COD zombies but instead of zombies its mutated animals and humans. And the title BLACK RAIN is meant by bombs going off and radiation rain coming in and radiating everything. So what do you guys think?
There will also be multiplayer and I can tell you that one of the multiplayer maps is Chernobyl Ukraine which is also a campaign level. Plus Chernobyl will also be a Radiatian Mode map also.
Plus who do you think should make this idea?




REMEMBER THIS IS JUST A GAME IDEA

Answer 1

I started reading this and thought it sounded amazing, but coming up to the part; "One of the attackers said to him,"Don't worry child, black rain will come." So a few years later, Connell is in the marines and is in conflict with the War Oracles. The leader of the War Oracles was known as Abdul Reneir (pronounciation-Ray-nair). His belief was to dominate the world and promise his people that he is the true leader of the world" you lost my interest. It honestly sounds to cliche.



This whole thing sounds too simple with too few secrets and single player thought, that and you've put more thought into multiplayer modes then you have single player stuff. It's like when I played the Battlefield3 campaign, it started out reasonably okay but then everything became too obvious - it was just countless excuses to make me shoot more stuff in different ways. It was like a massive tutorial for the Multiplayer- the game was pretty much only made for that.



I think you need to put more thought into your OWN universe for the game to go in, not try to squeeze it into ours and make it sound believable! That's how some of the best names out there get so famous- Halo, Mass effect, Star wars, Assassins creed - they all came up with a universe that they could bend to their will and make fit in any way possible.



Assassins creed does try to fit our world but at least they don't go too realistic, they change history, add stuff to it, they have a thick storyline in there with loops back on itself and connects together in ways the player cannot begin to fathom. In yours it just seems like a guys parents get killed, he swears revenge and you find out the motive behind the attack later.



WHAT I WOULD DO:

On top of that think WHY would they go after him anyway, jeapordising their plan by leaving a witness as well as wasting resources over a simple death - would a world leader bent on making his country the best actually do that?

I think you should add a darker, weirder layer to it. How about he is part of a cult, not a world leader but a terrorist organisation. Maybe they worship some other-worldly thing called the 'Black rain'. You would try making them act all insane only to find out later in-game that the Black Rain is controlling them all and planned it out.

Maybe this not-world-leader isn't even leading anything but secretly working behind the backs of his cult leaders, but they're all being controlled and the Rain saw them as getting in the way for some reason and decided to make them destroy each other.

Oh and another idea!! These just keep coming! At the end of the game the main character thinks he's defeated it but in fact gave into the reality of it's existance and goes insane or becomes controlled himself. If you go on an emotional journey throughout the game you get attached to the character and MORE SADNESS.

Answer 2

It's a good story, it's well research and developed. I approve. However, before thinking multiplayer, you HAVE to think Singleplayer.

Multiplayer helps a game, but what SELLS a game is a single player moder for most people. So you have to develop parts of the story, or chapters, if not it will devolve into something similar to the HORRIBLE Shadowrun multiplayer experience....no replay value.

Work your story into events, and bring new and unique elements. This has potential, but right now, sounds not very different from Modern Warfare. Try researching elements, settings and story plots that are unique and have never been done. Multiple path choices which leads you to different maps? Changing characters in the middle of the battle? I don't know, SOMETHING which will give texture.



But you're off to a great start, it has potential.



EDIT: I would change the name however. Black Rain or something similar is an already existing Xbox360 title. It has nothing to do with your idea, but you shoudl still change the name. Maybe Dark rain, gamma rain or some such, or Dark Rain Falling, or something.

Answer 3

Is Jackle the way in which you spell the title or is it a spelling mistake cuz I believe it should be Jackal. Also I feel Reneir must preserve his proper beliefs extra secret considering that i do not believe any one would fight for a single man simply so he might end up a tyrant. I feel he will have to be tricking the persons by way of making them believe he needs to finish all struggle via uniting the sector and creating a golden age but as soon as the arena is united he intends to rule over it with an iron fist as a dictator or Emperor. You also will have to add extra plot toward the radiation mode or else I suppose it will be out of location in this game. Potentially Reneir launches nukes but makes it seem adore it was from other nations to offer his guys extra intent to fight to unite the arena. The nukes can be growing the Black Rain and give the title extra which means than just ash and rain. Well these are my ideas on what you should do feel free to add them into your story.

Answer 4

I wouldn't play it simply because I neither play nor like first person shooter games. I think they are overrated and generally bad games. The story sounds kinda typical and cliche if you ask me, the games that stand out most nowadays are ones that are truly unique and have their own quirks that attract gamers. Using Chernobyl as a setting sounds cool though, the characters could be wearing some nuclear safety gear or something.

Answer 5

My bbfs name is Rj :)